No problem Mcfighter2, from your feedback I take it that the particle cloud is too big, I shall rescale it along with other additions for Version 2.

Yes, Valve did ruin TF2’s particle design, just like how they ruined paints with neon green and pink, and cosmetics with unfitting additions. Different people have worked on TF2 who aren’t versed with the game’s core design and result in additions that stray away from it.
Where is the twinkly cloud effect used? I’m not familiar with its usage.

I think what would help this effect is if the twinkles were removed as it adds visual noise. Besides that, I don’t know.

There are scenarios in which a submission is objectively bad enough that constructive criticism devolves to the advice of “starting from scratch”. At that point, it is not constructive, but in my opinion this is fine; this is a place where items get into the game, so I, the consumer of what gets in, should be able to say when something is bad and say that it shouldn’t get into the game.

Thanks for taking the time to hear me.

In your logic, This particle was made by Valve sprites, so Valve themselves ruined TF2s particle design, No custom sprites were used in making this Unusual.
We understand if common concepts were practiced, and none have been implemented in the game, thus our take on it was born.
Your contribution as a voter is to present constructive criticism, providing a variety of reasons and ways to provide a counter-solution, have a pleasant day, and I personally anticipate your reply.

So if you’ll excuse me: https://steamproxy-script.pipiskins.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=3037769184
Unless you fear somehow that this link will make this not be added to TF2, there’s no harm in leaving this here. After all, yours is the better effect, right?

I simply advocate for unusual effects that actually fit TF2’s particle design. This one and most other’s that have been added simply don’t look like TF2.
I linked the other effect because it shows exactly what I mean, showcasing how this effect could be much better.

OMG they made a unusual effects based on players opinions on 1% of traders item value being affected!

Fun fact: the Z letters in this particles are the same used with the Beta Tranquilizer Gun
https://wiki.teamfortress.com/wiki/Tranquilizer_Gun

-Added team colored particles
-Added Youtube preview
-Added in-game previews

the particle is now updated, thank you guys for your feedback

Particle now has different cloud colors and Z letters now zigzag

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Yeah the effect looks too similar to nebula. I would suggest to desaturate the colors, remove the white glows, change the Z's texture and size. You could also try to further work on the Z's movement, by making them zig-zag while going up or just making them spawn around the smoke and then vanish. Since there aren't many Zs being spawned you could also add a small smoke effect when they despawn, that could also help to differentiate it further from the unusual that people have been linking. Personally I don't really like the colors in the red version, I think the red should be more subtle like the blue is in the blu version.

also if its supposed to be teamcolored why does blu have the pink clouds in it.

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hell yeah

Not really something that would work with many hats in the game, especially sincere it’s almost the exact same as nebula. Should’ve tried something else like this one does https://steamproxy-script.pipiskins.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=3037769184

Ngl be it the plethora of several nebulean unusuals we've already git, or my disdain for the font used for the Zs (very non constructive),

It doesn't stick. Not really something that pops out or seems notable. It's a nice unusual regardless, but could use something to spicen things up a little.

This one's nice and all, but imo MeatwadMeatwad's example did it better.

Hello @Jan the, thank you that is such an excellent advice to make the secondary sprite (zzz) perform a zigzag movement, I shall implement it as soon as possible. Thank you very much.

Not that bad, but now that I got reminded by comments about nebula existing... Yeah looks similar, but it's still better since it's not as strong and wild.

Blue version would be better if that pinkish cloud wasn't in it. I would also put the zzz into zig-zag pattern of appearing while also changing the font completely to something smoother.
Desaturate the colours a bit could help to pull it away from the nebula looks.

that's just nebula

could instead have the sleepy zzz's somehow incorporated into the cloud instead og having the little white stars to differentiate it from nebula cuz rn it just looks like a team colored nebula with an out of place element that lacks cohesion